Face Engine

Thank you again. I've gone over it and fixed a few grammatical errors ("Jorj'" looks more correct than "Jorj's" to me, but if you're sure...). I'm going to start writing ...

Okay, I've edited it, and I think it's a lot better now. If you still think it's missing something, or if you see any errors please say.

Thanks. I've fixed all the grammar mistakes. I'll probably polish it up a bit tomorrow (well, today). Hmmz, one of you has said that the gory bits need more description, ...

Thank you very much for your review. Having re-read the story, I can see what you mean about detail and "showing rather than telling". I think I didn't spend enough ...